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Now a days cheaper airfare has become very frequent way to travel by Air, some people see this a good development, however some are against it. Please provide your thoughts on this and mention any example from your personal experience.

Mode of travelling to a destination has always been an important topic among people. A popular stratum of society considers that the trend of increase in the traffic of people travelling via air owing to cheaper
airfare
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 as a positive development.
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, in its sharp contrast, others opine differently and are against it. I bolster the former opinion and believe that the aviation industry has brought the whole of the world within reach.
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 with, reduction in the
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 have not only profited the aviation sector but
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 have made it convenient for people to
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 anywhere in the world comfortably.
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, travelling via air not only saves time but
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 helps people to reach the destination faster at the time of the emergency. In the USA,
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, in a study conducted by California University, it was observed that 65% of passengers preferred to
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 via air rather than through any other mode of travelling.
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, despite the advantages above, many people believe that owing to the frequent crashes being reported of the aeroplanes due to faulty parts has inclined people to
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 to their destination via road or railways. Even though the fares are low, people believe that safety comes
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.
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, the biggest sector which has been impacted due to cheaper
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 is railways and has added to the losses which railways were already burdened with and it is very evident from a report published by Ministry of Railways where it stated that the railways will not be able to break-even until
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 100 years. To conclude, I would like to reinstate that the reduction in
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 has allowed people to
travel
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 blithely anywhere on the globe. Even though the railways have been hit hard because of cheaper
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, the feasibility it offers to mankind is remarkable and I believe that the positive development of
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 trend predominantly outweighs the negative development.

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