Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encouraged to live independently.

Nowadays, there is a hot debate on whether grandparents ought to lead their lives with their children and grandchildren. As for me, I suggest that they should not share the living space with the young generations. Admittedly, it is beneficial for elderly people to live with their children and grandchildren. Most old people’s personal safety can be enhanced if they live with their descendants.
This
is mainly because the elderly,
in particular
those with limited mobility, can gain support at any time, especially in case of emergency. It is reported that an old person living alone was found dead after several days, with no one helping him call an ambulance.
In addition
, grandparents accompanied by their children have a higher level of emotional support by taking care of their grandchildren.
This
shared experience contributes to a lively and warm family atmosphere, where family members tend to care about each other.
However
, there are still benefits of old people living independently. One significant inconvenience of living with family members may be that their personal privacy would be reduced due to the limited housing space.
This
can lead to misunderstandings or quarrels between them. What’s worse, their generation gaps, which are represented by different living habits, social values, or modes of thinking, probably lead to conflicts. These conflicts would
further
lower their sense of happiness.
Besides
, old people who live independently can spend most of their time and energy in developing their own interests
such
as keeping pets, doing the gardening, or practising Taij, etc.
Otherwise
, most old people may have to sacrifice pursuing their own hobbies to help take care of their grandchildren.
Therefore
, I hold the belief that the old had better live separately from their children and grandchildren for their personal privacy, happiness, and interests, but I still recommend their visits especially on holidays or festivals to strengthen family bonds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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