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Some cites have few controls over the design and construction of housing and office buildings. People think that they should be free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Many have an opinion that
people
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 who are constructing houses or buildings
,
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 should be able to create them with their own
design
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. I agree with the point of view as it has many advantages
likes
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 the freedom to express their own
design
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 and
cost
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the cost
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 of a building can be reduced to their budget.
Firstly
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,
people
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 should have the right to choose a type of construction and
design
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 of
there
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their
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 house as they are building on their own land.
This
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 will help them to
design
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 the exterior and interior of
there
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their
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 house based on their requirements.
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, if an individual wants to create an
out of the world
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design
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,
then
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 he can be able to do so without any restriction from the city officials.
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, the public should have full freedom to
design
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 their house
as per
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according to
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 their needs.
Secondly
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, with the advent of technology, many cheap materials can be used by which cost-cutting can be done and that will not be possible if the cities want to adhere
with
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to
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 specific policies
of
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use
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the use
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 of materials. These technologies and planning of the residence can reduce financial value.
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,
a
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modular building, affordable housing,
movable
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and movable
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 housing are the current concepts of construction by which
capital
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the capital
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 required can be minimized drastically.
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,
people
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 should be able to choose, what kind of material they want to use
while
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 constructing a building. In conclusion, the advantages of
people
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 selecting the type of
design
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 will engulf the selection done by the officials of the city as the public will have a wide range of
idea
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ideas
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 to select from and they can take measures to reduce the cost.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly outline your main points. Make sure to state your opinion strongly.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. This will help with the flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check for simple grammar mistakes, such as 'there' instead of 'their'.
task achievement
You have strong arguments for why people should design their own buildings.
task achievement
You provided examples to support your points, which is good.
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