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Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at school. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has been always a point of debate that, Whether International news as a subject should be compulsory in pupils curriculum or it should be avoided as It is not useful for students. I will discuss both the views and give my opinion in the
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 education, Which would help in leading happy , meaningful and prosperous life. Some believe that there are already many subjects related to academic studies like Mathematics, Science, Chemistry, History, Geography.
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, Adding international news as Mandatory course would certainly be overburdened on tutees.
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 stage, Academic performance of the student plays a crucial role in deciding the
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 part of their education, Which in term shape their career. An excess of stress during
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, it would hamper their exam results.
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, Having awareness of global affairs would definitely sharpen their skills and career path. Either Directly or indirectly every country in the world is inter dependable to each other. Apparently,
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, Many students want to pursue higher studies in abroad and some people seeking job opportunities in western countries. By virtue of
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, They have to start learning about their work ethics, climate , conditions , economy , population, constitution, language and so on. Thereupon, Comprehensive details about the other country would assist them in their future prospectives. As displayed above, I personally believe that the advantages of studying global news are outweighed by its pitfalls. Perhaps it is not the appropriate time to revolutionize the curriculum and
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