The cost of flying has decreased significantly over the last decade. This has made overseas travel much more accessible. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

Undoubtedly, the trend of flying
to
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overseas has become popular around the globe. Some
people
think that the decreasing cost of
flights
has many positive
impact
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on them ;
however
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others
holds
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the
opposit
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opinions
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.
This
essay will discuss both pros and cons of cheaper flying
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on
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individuals. There are two primary advantages of cheap
flights
to
people
; mainly being, opportunities and good
acconomy
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economy
. First of all,
people
gets
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more chances to
travel
abroad by getting affordable
flights
. In the past most
of
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middle class
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people
were not
be
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able to
travel
to other countries to
fullfill
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fulfil
their dreams, but in
todays
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world
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world,
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they
get
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more opportunities to fly.
Secondly
, when
people
prefer to
travel
by plane
instead
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other
transport
, they help with their country's economy.
This
is because they spend more on
plane's
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plane
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ticket
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tickets
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rather than
spend
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on other
transport
such
as
bus
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buses
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,
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and ship
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ship
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ships
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.
On the other hand
, the trend of flying has some disadvantages as well.
Firstly
, some
people
are losing jobs in more developed countries.
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cheap
flights
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flights,
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most
people
prioritized
to
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plans, so the
others
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means of
transport
companies are facing
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lose
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in their business.
As a
result
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result,
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they have to fire some of their
employess
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employees
.
Moreover
, most of the airways companies
are
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provide cheap service to their customer because of cheap
flights
, so, travelers
in
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those
flights
cannot enjoy their
journy
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journey
.
To conclude
,
although
,
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cheap
flights
'
rate has
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many advantages ,
it
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they
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also
has
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have
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some drawbacks. So that
people
should
considered
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consider
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others
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other
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means of
transport
as well to
travel
.
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  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Tourism boost
  • Carbon emissions
  • Environmental degradation
  • Overtourism
  • Local resources
  • Infrastructure strain
  • Travel accessibility
  • Economic backgrounds
  • Commercialization
  • Dilution of local cultures
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