Individual should not allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society . what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There is no doubt the crime rate has been increased in recent times.

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ermitted to have a firearm, I personally disagree with

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statement because these piece of equipment saved many

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and not all shooting is dangerous since

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be a sporting activity.

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, guns have

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ublic in many countries, particularly, in developed ones, where it is normal to have one.

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is because the government grants

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permission to possess pistol for

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personal safety.

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, In the USA, the locals can access gun permission, as people live alone, criminals are so violent and cause damage to person and property. Eventually, for

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reduces the number of offences. Alternatively, the society would be

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by offenders and may not be possible to live peacefully.

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, not all gun holders shoot others to kill or murder.

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a competition, even, it is an item of Olympics so it is naive to think to impose

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an on them.

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, some poachers carry firearms when they go for hunting and

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armless activity, just for fun.

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, if they did not allow to possess one, it would have thought that inversion of

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personal freedom.

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scenario may result in serious repercussions to

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society. Interestingly, more death can be seen from

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oad accident, but it is not banned. In conclusion, while some opponents argue that pistols are banned for the betterment of

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society, I totally against

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, poor individuals, who cannot post personal security staff, would be suffered.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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285 words

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Individual should not allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society . what extent do you agree or disagree.

Fully explain your ideas

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The unlimited use of car caused many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use car? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Unemployment remains the biggest challenges to school-leavers in most countries. Ho far do agree with this assessment? what other challenges face young people today?

In some societies, more and more people are deciding to live alone. Why do you think this is? Do the advantages of living alone outweigh the disadvantages?