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Write a letter to a television company congratulating them on TV program that you have recently seen. Write a letter to the television company. In your letter -Mention when and why you watched it -Say why you liked it so much -What effect it might have on other people.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to
extent
Replace the word
extend
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 my commemoration to you for the success of a long-lasting
show
 Rising
star
Capitalize word
Star
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 with the highest ratings. I have watched
this
 reality
show
 on
Voot
Correct article usage
the Voot
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 app with all
uncut
Correct article usage
the uncut
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 scenes. I was unable to take my eyes off from television for 2 hours every day. I relentlessly loved
this
show
 because it represented people with different kinds of talent
at
Change preposition
on
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 a single platform from various sections of society. Another prominent reason behind its success and popularity among youngsters was that they were able to vote for their famous contestants to save them and see
as
Correct pronoun usage
them as
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winner
Fix the agreement mistake
winners
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. It has provided another level of confidence and motivation to people to
show
 their talent to others and get famous to get financially wealthy.
Moreover
, it helped some unknown singers and dancers to gain popularity, who were lost somewhere
due to
 lack of money. I hope to see the next season of
this
show
 soon. Yours faithfully, Navneet Kaur.
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coherence cohesion
Consider varying sentence structures to enhance the narrative flow even further.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that every paragraph focuses on one main idea to maintain clarity and coherence.
task achievement
The letter fulfills all parts of the task, addressing when and why you watched the show, why you liked it, and the effect it might have on others.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable, respectful, and conveys positivity.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is clear, and ideas flow smoothly from one to another.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used and add to the formality of the letter.
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