Some people believe that sports subjects should be removed from school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Schools are
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reat medium for
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learning and played important role in the evolution of mankind. Even sports
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been
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mportant aspect of the
school
. It
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that sports subjects should be removed from
school
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curriculum
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. Analyzing the physical and mental health benefits and early opportunity as
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ports person will prove
this
.
Firstly
, sports will help the students to keep
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physically
fit. It will
also
help them to accept the defeat in the game as well as imbibe the feeling of
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eam player at
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arly age.
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many students might not have ground or friends
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their residence. The
school
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nly place where they can play.
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lear that sports
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needed during
school
hours.
Secondly
, the
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competitions
competition
held at
school
will provide
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latform for the students to identify their talent.
For instance
, the
school
will have different games and coaches to
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facilitate
sports.
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will get an opportunity to try out different games and get coached on the game of their choice. The students can
also
represent schools in various
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competitions
and it will be
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oundation for their sports career. To summerise, sports at schools is
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necessary
to keep
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ealthy body and mind of the students and
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facilitate
to
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identify
the inner sportsperson.
Therefore
, it is clear that the idea of removing sports subjects from
school
curriculam
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curriculum
cannot be supported. After
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horough analysis
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the subject, the positive effects of the sports on the students are far greater than the adverse effects, and because of
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sports subjects should never be removed from
school
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curriculum
curricula
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