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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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In recent years, the working habits
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canged
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changed
 drastically. Now
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most of the skilled people consider to work for themselves by having their own business and their team, rather than giving there precious time and tireless efforts for the progress of some other organization and to help them
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 their dreams.
To begin
 with, having an organizational job which is bound to follow hard timelines in terms of attendance and less flexibility towards the employee personal health and well being often end up with a frustrated life.
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Distinguished
 organizations like Google, Microsoft and Facebook already has taken
this
 issue very seriously and
copinng
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coping
 with
this
 by providing all the
posible
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possible
 flexibilities to their employees in order to maximize their productivity.
On the other hand
, self-employment is not that easy as it looks from the far end. One has to deal with the hardest situations to win his bread and sometimes
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 out the situations that one can not
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.
For example
, if an
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engineer
 decided to start his own consultancy and keep struggling in getting the projects
then
this
 will lead to the hardest survival situations for his startup. To recapitulate, it solely
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 upon the set of skills that one has to decide
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 to opt for being employed or go for self-employment. I strongly
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 that with dedication, motivation and with the right direction anyone can turn the table around and live the life as he
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instead
 of waiting for the right opportunity or time.
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