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People aim to achieve balance between work and other activities of their lives, but few are able to do this. Suggest problems in balancing and some solution for over-coming such problems.

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Work-life balance is the latest buzzword in the social circle where people strive very hard to achieve it but very few are actually able to do it.
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ersonal relationship of the concerned person goes for a toss,
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nprecedented increase in the ambition of a human which is compelling them to take up things which
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 beyond their managing ability. As a consequence, people spend more time in
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ffice or on other chores and less with family which on a long run impacts their interpersonal camaraderie.
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, as per the survey published in business today, within a decade, India has seen a dramatic rise from 5% to 30% in the divorce rate of the working individuals. A suitable solution will be to create a daily schedule which will be followed diligently. To elaborate, a person can list down his daily activities pertaining to work and family, and follow it with perfect execution.
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 with his loved ones.
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improvement in interpersonal relationships by almost 15%. To conclude, it is imperative for
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people to follow their dreams and grab it with both hands but not at the cost family. As a remedy, they can create and follow a to-do list which will help them to
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 more effectively and efficiently.
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