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Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation.to what extend do you agree or dis agree.

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The environment is a humongous price
is
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given by God for the
wellbeing
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well-being
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 of human
being
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beings
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. Most of the
people
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 in the society believe that
environment
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the environment
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 should be conserved by the present generation for growing age groups in the prospective.Discussing
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 statement is
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 and I completely agree with
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 and positive results regarding
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 statement. On the one hand ,many
people
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 in the public have a belief that we should take
an
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action to ensure our nature for
next
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the next
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 generation.But, most
people
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 in the world do not care about world wellness.
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, for cultivation in many countries use chemical fertilizer rather than using organic fertilizer.
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 of
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 soil has been devastated in many areas and water springs
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also
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 been smashed
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 kidney diseases to the
people
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.
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 the aforementioned reasons, it wouldn't be an advantage for
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future
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 population.
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, Most of the public
believe
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 that nature should be saved for the
future
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.
According to
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this
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 opinion, many
people
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 contribute to it.To illustrate,They discard garbage properly,if they cut a tree for their uses, they are used to replant another five plants
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 of that and look after they grow enough.Those are the steps
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some
people
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 in society have taken to save the world for
future
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generation
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generations
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. In conclusion,
making
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taking
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 some steps to conserve the environment is the best way to keep them well for the
future
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.It is one of our responsibilities. If we protect it for tomorrow,
its
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benefits
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 survival not only for them but
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 for us.

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coherence cohesion
The introduction lacks clarity and conciseness. It is important to clearly state your position and present a preview of the main points.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure and does not effectively guide the reader through the main points. It would be beneficial to use cohesive devices to link ideas and improve the essay's overall coherence.
lexical resource
Expanded vocabulary would improve the essay's lexical resource. It is advised to use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the depth of your writing.
grammatical range
The grammatical range is limited and impacts the fluency of the essay. Paying attention to sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and the use of different sentence types would be beneficial to improve your score in this criterion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental conservation
  • sustainable practices
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • ecosystem
  • biodiversity
  • waste management
  • conservation
  • global warming
  • greenhouse gases
  • natural resources
  • renewable resources
  • fossil fuels
  • reducing emissions
  • eco-friendly
  • recycling
  • alternative energy
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