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Some think the current generation should take steps to protect the environment for the next generation.to what extend do you agree or dis agree.

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Nature
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 is a humongous gift from God
which received
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 to the wellbeing of human beings.Some people think that they should
be taken
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 measures to maintain the environment for the future
while
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 others
do
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 not
concern
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it
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about it
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.I totally agree with
this
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 notion and
this
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 essay will discuss both positive and negative impacts. On the one hand, do not take necessary actions from today we have to face natural disasters in the near future. We should concern about air, water and soil
pollutions
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pollution
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. If not we have to face inevitable problems,
such
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 as floods, soil and sea erosions.
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, with the above conditions
automatically
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global warming rises. It results, for
examples
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example
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,
disappear
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the disappearance of
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 the glazier layer,
increase
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increased
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 seawater levels and
spread
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the spread
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diseases
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of diseases
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 from unknown microorganisms.
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, if people need to survive they should love
the
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nature
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 mother. On the other hand, humans should take measures to deforestation and reduce environmental
hazard
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hazards
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 things. Because, forests are the sources which provide pure air to
breath
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breathe
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, clean water to drink and
supplier
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suppliers
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 of all basic needs.
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,
poisons
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poisonous
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 things,
to
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illustrate, industrial garbage into water streams and excessive carbon dioxide from vehicles and industries must be discarded in proper ways.
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 the aforementioned reasons,
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otherwise
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our surroundings
unable
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are unable
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 to
protect
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be protected
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. In conclusion, most
of
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the
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people
in
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around
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 the globe have
a
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faith that they should look after
nature
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 to reduce the effects of natural disasters and global warming by re-plantation and environmentally friendly measures. Because there is an equal balance between
the
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man and
nature
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.

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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure of the essay by organizing your ideas in a more coherent and cohesive manner. Ensure that there is a clear introduction and conclusion.
task response
Your essay provides a partial response to the task. Make sure to fully address both the extent of your agreement or disagreement and provide a clear opinion.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of lexical resources. Consider using more varied and precise vocabulary to convey your ideas effectively.
grammatical range
Work on the accuracy and variety of your sentence structures. Avoid errors in subject-verb agreement and construct more complex and varied sentences.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental conservation
  • sustainable practices
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • ecosystem
  • biodiversity
  • waste management
  • conservation
  • global warming
  • greenhouse gases
  • natural resources
  • renewable resources
  • fossil fuels
  • reducing emissions
  • eco-friendly
  • recycling
  • alternative energy
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