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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Increasingly more
art
 exhibitions employ
entry
 fees for visitors. Speaking personally, I believe
this
 trend to be rather positive because
money
 flow to museums can be a critical factor for the prosperity of both artists and facilities, despite the argument of lower attendance rate.
To begin
 with, nowadays,
art
 galleries and artists experience a severe decline in their
finance
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 conditions, and the new implementation would occur as a change factor. The
money
 collected by the charging for attendance in
art
 galleries could be invested in new collections that have been drawn by immature painters as well as in modernization of whole constructions of buildings. Recently, the national
art
 collection museum located in the capital of Kazakhstan imposed admission fees that contributed to the foundation of a new
art
 hall with paintings represented by beginner artists. Despite the aforementioned benefits, it is argued that the new changes in
entry
 fees would discourage potential customers from visiting museums.
This
 argument seems irrelevant due to some reasons.
Firstly
, people with
d
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eep interest in
art
 would not be stopped by some
entry
 fees.
For instance
, plenty of my acquaintances have an incline to
art
, and they pleasantly pay
money
 in order to survey new masterpieces.
Secondly
, there is a downward trend in the museum attendance where the only remaining people who still visit them are
truly
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an of
art
 galleries.
Consequently
, those who viewed paintings prior to
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mplementation of
entry
 fees
,
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 will still prefer to view them. To conclude, the trend of charging admission fees are far more advantageous when contrasted with drawback because the earned
money
 could maintain
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ew structure of the
art
 as much as modern artists.
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