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Due to low- cost airlines, many more people can travel abroad than ever before. do the advantages that tourists bring to the countries they visit outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the past, travel abroad was a difficult thing, only certainty
people
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 did
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 journey. Nowadays, more and more
people
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 are travelling overseas
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 the affordability of airlines. Despite the fact that the presence of
tourists
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 can contribute to a detrimental effect on local
tourism
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, I believe that many
visitors
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 from other
countries
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 can promote better economic sectors. Those who focus on the drawbacks of
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 tend to worry about the damage of numerous
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 destinations created by
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.
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, coral reefs in many
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,
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 as Australia and Vietnam, are often damaged by
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 during their scuba diving or snorkelling.
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 will impact the life of many magnificent creatures under the sea which rely on the growth of coral reefs.
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, ancient historical treasures
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 as the stupa in Borobudur temple, are being worn down by
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.
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, the more
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 visit
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 destinations, the more destruction will be gained by the
countries
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.
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, I would argue that there are powerful benefits to a country having a strong
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 industry and that not only do these benefits outweigh the disadvantages but
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, the aforementioned problems are relatively easy to solve.
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tourists
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 provide jobs for local
people
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. As millions of
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 flood into
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 attractions, locals are employed in droves by restaurants, hotels and retail services, and transport and security companies. Opportunities are
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 created for locals to set up their own small businesses.
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, locals can be employed as tour guides to manage and educate the
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 to prevent them from causing damage. The more
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 that come, the more jobs that can be created.
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,
tourism
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 can have a huge impact on a country’s economy in general.
Tourists
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 spend a lot of money on travel, accommodation, food, entertainment and so on. Many
countries
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 in
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 world rely on
tourism
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 to boost their economies in
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 manner. In conclusion,
while
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 it is indisputable that the existence of
tourists
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 can cause a lot of damage in many local
tourist
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 destinations, I believe that because of creates jobs for local
people
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 and boosts the country’s economy, the advantages of
tourism
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 outweigh the disadvantages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure development
  • gentrification
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural dilution
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • authenticity
  • commercialization
  • vulnerable economy
  • job creation
  • natural habitat
  • global community
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