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Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that study cost of all learners should be reimbursed by higher authorities from nursery
level
 to graduation
level
. I completely agree with
this
 methodology, due to these two prime reasons.
Firstly
,
this
 practice will provide the opportunity for
education
 to all underprivileged students.
Secondly
, it will improve the
literacy
rate
 of the concern nations as well.
First
 of all, unpaid
education
 from primary
level
 to university
level
 definitely provides the provision of study to poor students. Due to
shortagee
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shortage
shortages
 of money, poor learners skip their school
education
 and start small part-time jobs. As a consequence, they could not achieve
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esired success in future.
For example
, the latest survey by "The Times of India, in 2019, reveals that due to fewer finance resources 30% of students in India leave their schooling and start small jobs.
Hence
 free
education
 will provide the platform for training to poor learners so that they can architect their prosperous future. The
second
 factor which deserves attention is that unpaid schooling has been proliferated the
literacy
rate
 of the concern countries for the past 50 years.
for instance
, the latest report by "Oxford University" claims that in Canada, in 2010, when Government took the innovative decision of free
education
 to all, since
then
 not only their
literacy
rate
 has been improved from 70% to 90%. If the administrators want to
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develop develop
 their states
then
, they should pass the free ordinance the law for the general public. In conclusion, it is a revolutionary step of the government to facilitate the facility of free study to all students, because
this
 practice will provide the opportunity for training to all impoverished students and will improve the
literacy
rate
 of the nations as well which could not be ignored.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic background
  • equitable society
  • government-funded
  • higher quality standards
  • financial limitations
  • inefficiencies
  • wasteful spending
  • cost-effective
  • innovate
  • undervaluing
  • dropout rates
  • financial burden
  • well-being
  • higher education uptake
  • increased taxes
  • reallocation
  • vital sectors
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