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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved in a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that, currently, the entire earth is affected by various issues that impact on our environment.
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 It is sometimes thought these hurdles could be solved globally, others think that it can be resolved locally. In my opinion, I personally consider the solutions
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 based on the type and gravity of the problem. On the one hand, advocates of global submit
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oint out that as
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 cannot be limited to any particular region.
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 a joint meeting, in which the world leaders, scientists and other experts should be participated to make a decision to how to handle
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 skillfully.
For example
, Climate change
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, which chaired by the USA, in which most of the world countries have
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embership
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membership
.
On the other hand
, opponents of the above- mentioned argument think that many environmental challenges are irrupted by locally.
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, by educating and imposing stricter punishments on natives would be fruitful,
then
 any global movement.
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, in India, The Ganga, a river, which is highly contaminated by people and factories on the bank of the river. I firmly believe that if any environment issue is not limited
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one place,
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 could be handled by the support of different countries. It has been seen that, even, hazards are caused by one country and the effects would be seen everywhere.Take an example of Ozon
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depletion
, which might be caused by China, the whole world is suffering due to
this
. While carbon emissions due to heavy traffic can be reduced by the government. In conclusion, even people have a different opinion
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whether environmental issues are handled locally or globally. I think that
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 purely based on gravity and type of hurdles.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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