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Some people think experience is more important than knowledge. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, there has been a noticeable trend favouring
experience
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 over
knowledge
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 in many countries.
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 approach offers certain
advantages
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, it may
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 present potential drawbacks. In my opinion, the disadvantages of
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 outweigh the
advantages
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. On the one hand, experienced employees often possess a lot of practical skills from years of work, and
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experience
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 enables them to navigate complex situations.
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, doctors could use a combination of years of clinical
experience
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 with different patients. If a patient requires surgery, doctors tend to be more experienced in dealing with different situations.
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, experienced workers serve as mentors for younger colleagues, providing guidance and support based on their
experience
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 and extensive
knowledge
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.
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, companies prefer to offer experienced workers over
knowledge
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.
On the other hand
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, prioritising
experience
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 over
knowledge
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 may have some drawbacks.
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, in IT industries where technology and innovation play a role, a lack of up-to-date
knowledge
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 could prevent progress and creation,
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 experienced employees may use traditional methods and struggle to adapt to new technology without foundational theoretics.
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, favouring
experience
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 over
knowledge
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 could result in missed opportunities to foster creativity. New graduates may bring innovative ideas and approaches to
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. If companies value
experience
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, organisations risk missing out on valuable opportunities for growth. In conclusion, there are clear
advantages
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 to favouring
experience
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 in the workplace. It is recognised that the potential drawbacks of overlooking
knowledge
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. In my view, the
advantages
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 of
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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, it may be necessary to establish a balance between
experience
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 and
knowledge
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 to seek sustainable development.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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