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Today, more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?

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People interested in travelling has been increased significantly compared to earlier years.There are
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 essay will describe the reason and the advantage that humans will benefit from travelling. There are many factors which drive the travel behaviour of people like attractive tour programmes, business tours or in some case to ease the tension from work.Over the years, the media and online promotions favouring different tour packages in attractive prices has increased tenfolds.Due to the competition in the markets
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the prices are very reasonable and easily affordable for all kinds of people,including rich and poor.
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, tour for business has
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hort or long journey to get
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elease from the work pressure.A recent survey in "Times of India" mentioned that people approximate 50% of the survey participants takes
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acation to relieve job tension and spending time with family. Meanwhile, there are a number of benefits associated with travelling like people can learn a new place ,culture and journeys have a soothing effect to calm the mind. All travels are very good opportunity to learn new things in life.It will help to relieve tension and brings a positive feeling to life. To conclude, people movement for a number of reasons and the main driving factors are leisure travel,work-related and the benefit of travelling includes help people to start fresh,more confident and brings more meaning in their life.
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