facebook represents a very powerful medium of influence over large populations. There are many positive aspects of facebook. however many people feel that it is doing irreparable harm. to what extent do you agree with the statement? what do you think should be done to minimize the negative aspects of facebook

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useful contents on

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that it became harm to your life, which you can not payback. I strongly agree with that statement. I will put light on negative aspects and give a view to minimizing that.

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of co-operative companies have rules for employees, that do not put companies information or idea and new product information unless the

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would be used by criminals and terrorist to manipulate youngsters. Youngsters are easily put trust in information are on

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arge number of hours. There are many to compact the bad influence of

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can ban

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some words from the application, if someone tries to use it. They will be disconnected by

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and only allowed after investigation. That would be protected youth to bad influence. In a nutshell,

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advantages. There should work on the problems and minimize the before its become dragon.

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