A local school is requesting ideas for renovations. Write to them and include Problems they have now Suggestions to change How they could make these changes

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Dear Sir or Madam , I, a concerned parent, am writing to offer a few suggestions for the upcoming refurbishment of the

school

premises. I believe implementing these recommendations will help the students and staff alike. As you must be aware, the

school

is currently facing severe water shortages.

Although

water conservation is practised in residential areas, it is not enforced in the

school

. To tackle

this

, we could install

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rainwater water

rainwaterwater

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harvesting plant on the roofs which will not only save water but

also

ensure adequate supply throughout the academic year. Another problem is overcrowding in the classes. The rate at which student enrolment is increasing, soon it will be impossible to accommodate all of the pupils. Adding another floor to the middle

school

building should counteract

this

deluge of new admissions. I am aware that the

school

is operating

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a shoe-string budget but we can go ahead with these changes without over-extending. Rainwater harvesting

plant

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plants

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can be procured at a 20 per cent discount. As for the extension of the building, many parents-including me- have decided to volunteer. If we all pitch in together,

this

can be achieved in no time. Hoping for a positive response. Yours Sincerely David Lee.

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