In some countries few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think this is good for the country, while other believe that government should control the salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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huge economic
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in major developing countries around the world.
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social problems. I do believe that
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the government shouldn’t ever try to control people’s salaries. The main problem is not about how high is the people’s wage, but the difference between the lower salary comparing to
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ountries. Developed nations don’t have
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wide difference between salaries. And it reflects directly to the country development and to people’s lifestyle.
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does not seem a good policy for any nation. The World free market depends on capitalism to succeed. The law of demand and supply sets (determines) prices and distributes goods and services.
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country development rather than controlling the free market.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealth inequality
  • economic growth
  • motivation
  • talent acquisition
  • consumer spending
  • tax revenue
  • redistributing wealth
  • market forces
  • income disparity
  • social stability
  • freedom of choice
  • meritocracy
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