Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone’s lives. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while other say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that commercials are ubiquitous. While it is sometimes thought that adverts have many merits, others believe that bring several demerits. In my opinion, I strongly support the advocates' view as

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o know about the new products in the markets even though the latter think it creates

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culture. On the one hand, supporters consider while advertising any newly launched item can reach out

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its customers very easily.

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would help them to compare the quality and prices of

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particular things.

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, mobile phones are advertised on both virtual and visual media to attract people and sale them to the target population and

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allows the customers to choose a cell according to their preference.

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is not only helps

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the business but consumers

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benefitted.

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, opponents of the above- mentioned argument point out that mostly these commercials pester the

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, especially, children hugely.

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often makes people

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buy things, which are unnecessary and useless for them, eventually, these families

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in a position, where they would have to pay a huge amount of debt.

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, by using child artists, celebrity

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and creating false claims they manipulate the viewers and make them

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all the updated version of the things.

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would lead

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use and throw culture, which is extremely dangerous as it can cause piling up of waste materials everywhere.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

244 words

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Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone’s lives. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while other say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railwaw lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled they say that the only way to increase recycling is for goverments to make it a legal requiremet. to what extent do you agree or diagree

In modern society, many people think that primary schools should teach science and technology rather than history and geography, which are useless and boring. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?