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in many western countries, there is an increasing number of choosing to have no children. what advantages and disadvantages to having no children?

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ostly married
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 are not prefer having baby
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especially in western countries. The benefit of
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couples to live freely.
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, the drawback is loneliness and lack of support in elderly age. The basic advantage of childlessness, married couples are free to move, focused on their career and spend time with each other.
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they do not have responsibilities of taking care to someone and they are more strong in terms of finances.
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, in America
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most young
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are
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 career and they do not
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 for a
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,
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hild can be
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boarded
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 there is no one for
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 after in elderly aged. People may feel loneliness and missed someone give them
priorties
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priorities
 having fun with them.
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 in old age
couple
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 another problem that will b financial aid, usually
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ouple who do not have kids they spent money on
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 their wish and when they getting old by the time they may have
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hortage of money
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in Asian countries like Pakistan, India couples without kids they spent most of
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arnings for getting luxurious
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 but in the end
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they lost
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 because of no source of income. To conclude, even though there are advantages of
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 with having s
child
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 for married couples, they may have
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xtra expense of
child
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 but their lives full of happiness while the
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child free
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childfree
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 couples are enjoyed their
life
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ace but in long terms
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they feel
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. Regardless of
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dvantages and disadvantages
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married couples have both choices
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 live a
life
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