The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries . Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

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in future. In
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recent years,
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conducted
about teenagers
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and the result was shocking. In many countries, teenagers have more involved in crime
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compare
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ast decade. There are
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that about possibilities of crime rate among
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puberty
age
.
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rong way, would be
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games. The
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USA
use
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banned a
game
name "pubg". The reason behind, many people are getting angry, when they are do not allowed play
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and due to
this
many kids, killed or very physically
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aggressive
with them.
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reat platform but, there are many
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nternet. Which have strongly
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contain, would be impact high school student.
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life
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.
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in a more style, racing and fighting scene.
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yougstars
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youngsters
to copy that kind of
this
in real
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and
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spoiled
spoil
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life
. There are many ways to counter
this
problem. The very
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is, many countries are closely put
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build a team, which
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analyze
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ame and
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approved for market. The best example is
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, the past 5 years ago, the
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blue wheal is
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release
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in
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did not allow
game
and
then
they found they manipulate teenagers for
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suicide
.
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nternet. That would
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people to go into
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rong site. In a nutshell, teenagers are
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future. Every problem
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a solution. County would be
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introduced
program for
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encourage
teenagers are the best idea.
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