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In some countries, young people from the countryside are moving to larger towns and cities while older people are staying in the countryside. What problems might this cause ? What solutions can help to resolve this issue ?

#countries #people #countryside #towns #cities
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of the
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 in six different continents of the world. Overall, most of the continents spent the greatest amount of
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North America and Europe. They used more
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 for industrial purposes. Central Asia used the highest percentage of
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 in the agricultural field, with 88%.
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 uses of
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 were under 50%. In general, domestic and industrial
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 uses were the lowest in several continents. In Central Asia, only 5% of the
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 the same field.
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