IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in seperate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your orn opinion.

#people #boys #girls #seperate #schools #benefit #orn
There is no doubt that mixed schooling has been most popular in recent times.
Although
 it is sometimes thought that co-education has many merits, opponents think that
single
Add a hyphen
single-sex
show examples
sex
 educational institutions help children to perform better. In my opinion, I firmly believe that studying in a mixed
school
 makes students integrate to their
society
 in a fast manner. On the
one
 hand, advocates of mixed
school
 claim that by doing
this
 the younger generation is prepared to encounter the social life that around them and I support
this
 viewpoint.
This
 is because our
society
 is not uni-sexed, where they require to
work
 and engage with different genders.
For example
, it has been seen that, when a child exposes to only
one
 gender throughout his education, he would face difficulty when he would be asked to
work
 along with his opposite
sex
. Probably, the staff may not perform according to their ability. There is no doubt that mixed schooling has been most popular in recent times.
Although
 it is sometimes thought that co-education has many merits, opponents think that
single
Add a hyphen
single-sex
show examples
sex
 educational institutions help children to perform better. In my opinion, I firmly believe that studying in a mixed
school
 makes students integrate to their
society
 in a fast manner. On the
one
 hand, advocates of mixed
school
 claim that by doing
this
 the younger generation is prepared to encounter the social life that around them and I support
this
 viewpoint.
This
 is because our
society
 is not uni-sexed, where they require to
work
 and engage with different genders.
For example
, it has been seen that, when a child exposes to only
one
 gender throughout his education, he would face difficulty when he would be asked to
work
 along with his opposite
sex
. Probably, the staff may not perform according to their ability.
Submitted by Sal on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: