Your friend delivered a baby girl. Congratulate her on this good news and write how you feel. In your letter, explain your situation about your inability to come and see her in person. In your letter: Say how happy you are on this news Explain your situation that you could not attend this important occasion What gifts you have brought for her

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Dear Mary, How are you? Hope you are having an amazing time now with having been gifted with a little princess. I'm enormously elated after having heard

this

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news from your husband and I really wanted to turn up there;

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, my boss has tasked me

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important assignment that needs to be delivered within the

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two days.

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has been the best news to me

since

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recent months and you really cannot imagine how I rejoice despite my hectic work schedule. I immediately told

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to my wife and she is extremely eager to see you. As I stated, the task that was assigned takes up a large sum of my daily time and it is crucial that I complete it within the stipulated time. We will leave our town in the

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two days to see you after having completed

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work. You may know that I'm not quite good at buying presents especially for infants and

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my wife has bought a baby care kit that contains essentials

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as baby soap, a delicate towel, and importantly a swinging baby cradle. We imagine that your little princess will love what we bought for her. And don't worry, I'm getting your favourite chocolate, Ferrero Rocher, from my town, which you have been asking me for so long. Do call me on my number or write an email if I should buy anything else for you. See you soon! Love Jay

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

244 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some people think that schools are too competitive and that this has a negative impact on children. Others believe the competitive environment encourages children to achieve. Discuss both views and give opinion

Topic 2: These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

in some countries , students live with their family while studying at a university . In other countries , students attend university in another city . Do you think the advantages of living away from family home while attending outweigh the disadvantages ?

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed.

Some children spend hours every day on their smart phones. Why is this, the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example for your own knowledge or experience