People are becoming dependent on the Internet and phone. Do the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the wake of advancing technology, people use
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omputer and mobile phone in a habit. I think the drawbacks outweigh the advantages. In
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both sides of the argument and give my own point of view. Nowadays everybody gets at least one technological things,
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as
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adget, a laptop and so on. There is no doubt it has changed our life so much, meanwhile, there are some disadvantages.
For example
, it has changed our way of communication and
this
is common that we use apps to have a conversation.
However
, it is not a
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physically
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meeting and it just a
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of
this
kind of contact.
Therefore
, we do not have emotional communication.
As a result
, the relation of people
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not as close as before.
On the other hand
, there are
also
some benefits, like it has
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the development of the economy. It helps many
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corporations
to contact which can build up their business.
For instance
, there are many companies
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eed to through
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nternet to keep in touch with their business partner and make deals with them.
Moreover
, it improves our convenience. The evidence is when we get lost, we cannot
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ocated where we are. But now we can use the google map to get a location.
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us go everywhere that we can not get lost. In conclusion,
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we becoming dependent the technological science which
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us less
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emotional communication.
However
, I strongly believe that the advantages
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conomy and the
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convenience
conscience
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