People are becoming dependent on the Internet and phone. Do the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages?
In the wake of advancing technology, people use I will consider
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both sides of the argument and give my own point of view.
Nowadays everybody gets at least one technological things, Remove the article
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such
as g
adget, a laptop and so on. There is no doubt it has changed our life so much, meanwhile, there are some disadvantages. Add an article
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For example
, it has changed our way of communication and this
is common that we use apps to have a conversation. However
, it is not a psysically
meeting and it just a Correct your spelling
physically
physical
messages
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message
this
kind of contact. Therefore
, we do not have emotional communication. As a result
, the relation of people do
not as close as before.
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On the other hand
, there are also
some benefits, like it has increase
the development of the economy. It helps many Change the verb form
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corportations
to contact which can build up their business. Correct your spelling
corporations
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, there are many companies n
eed to through Add a pronoun
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nternet to keep in touch with their business partner and make deals with them. Add an article
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Moreover
, it improves our convenience. The evidence is when we get lost, we cannot l
ocated where we are. But now we can use the google map to get a location. Change the verb form
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This
make
us go everywhere that we can not get lost.
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although
we becoming dependent the technological science which make
us less Change the verb form
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emotional communication. Remove the article
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, I strongly believe that the advantages outweight
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