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In Britain, Many old age house are made nowadays. the expenses are paid by the governments. Who do you think should pay for this care, government or the family?

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There is no doubt that the UK government has
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 a huge amount of money for the welfare of the older generation for many years. People have a different opinion on whether the authority or the family requires to pay the expenses of the old age homes. I personally think that
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 is the responsibility of the country as every citizen contributes to
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conomy of the nation. The primary reason why I think the government needs to pay the expenditure of the
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 of the
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old age
 care home because the residents had paid taxes when they were working. Now, they are in their later days and they expect they need free treatment and care, in return
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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