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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #members #students
Nowadays,
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 people
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 that colleges should admit
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ame number of students in every subject. While I utterly disagree with
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 will opine my opinion using relative illustrations.
To begin
 with, it is not up to university admission department to determine which course students would like to
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 in. Students have freedom
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 chose whichever subject they would like to study.
For example
, Many female students
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 in degree courses like Human resource compare to Male student.
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h
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uge number of men
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enrollment
 in fields like engineering.
Secondly
, Some fields of studies naturally attract one gender more than the other.
For instance
,
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statistics
 shows there
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 one female scientist in
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contrast
constant
 to four male
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. Subjects like Engineering attract
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ajority of male students due to
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complexity
 of the subject.
This
 trend
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also
 support by our society norms where men are pushed into these fields and women are told to study less complex subjects as they are considered to be less intelligent. To conclude,
although
 it will be ideal for
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institutes
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qual number of students in all their offered subjects,
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i
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 do not believe it is up to them.
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of
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 choosing the subjects lies with the people.
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