Write a letter to an editor of a newspaper about a mistake from a recent article. Include What the mistake was How they can correct it How to avoid this mistake in the future

Dear
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, I am writing concerning the June issue of the magazine “Adventures
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the
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”. Being your regular reader, I always was satisfied with the content of it.
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, in the issue mentioned above, I have found a mistake
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The Apple Festival, which is going to be conducted in my home city Almaty in August from 5 to 21. Unfortunately, the wrong date of the festival (from 22 to 31 of August) is printed in the article describing the celebration.
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, it will definitely have a negative effect on local tourism and sales as tourists will arrive when everything
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over. It goes without saying that foreigners may be frustrated about missing the festival as it is colourful and appealing
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the fact that “Apport” is one of the best sorts of apples in Central Asia.
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the owners of local
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may be disappointed and will lose their profit because of the lack of tourists during the festival. Could you please publish the correct information in the July issue of the magazine? I think it will be useful, especially if you put a special note that it is a correction of the previous misleading information.
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, I would like to advise you to double-check important dates prior to the printing of
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issues of the magazine. Thank you in advance for your kind cooperation, Yours sincerely, Maria V

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coherence and cohesion
The structure is mostly logical, but consider breaking down some sentences for clarity and coherence. Each paragraph should focus on a distinct idea clearly.
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Ensure that your introduction succinctly states the purpose of your writing more directly.
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Include a brief summary or a concluding remark to reinforce your main point at the end of your letter.
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The letter maintains a polite tone throughout, which is appropriate for a formal correspondence.
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You provided specific details about the mistake, helping to clarify your point effectively.
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