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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The growing rate of criminal acts spreading worrisome and insecurity among societies as the topic is concerned to impose capital punishment for the convicts.
Therefore
, life imprisonment is a sole solution to hinder the heinous crimes. I strongly agree with the stance and
this
 essay will elucidate, why
this
 verdict is mandatory to stop the violence.
To begin
 with, there are plenty of crimes that government cannot control with warnings and alerts
such
 as; gang rape
that is
 the major leading cause of the distress and anxiety in society. Convicts are roaming around freely
thus
 targeting women for their desires.
This
 cause is not only scary for parents but
also
 hinders the freedom of women. To illustrate, a recent incident happened on the highway where a women car driver become the target of gang-raped and authorities could not arrest them. Criminals are fearless as there is no death penalty. The government should implement the sanction to deter the offenders as
this
 is the need for immediate time.
Secondly
, among rapists, other crimes should be penalized
that is
 the upsurge of the juvenile offenders who are indulged in underground mafia and drug-trafficking.
Such
 particular cases involved girls and boys of rich families where they are planted to do drug distribution in universities and colleges. These acts require strict punishments.
This
behavior
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 has been overlooked in our society as there is no awareness and campaigns over the pitfalls of smoking and night parties. To illustrate, a recent survey by a young journal cited that drug-abuse is most common among universities where students tried these to get rid of depression and the crime-index is reduced since the administration started punishing offenders. To recapitulate, as the above statements argued that how essential is the capital punishment to eradicate the violence
therefore
 the government should introduce aggressive laws against offenders.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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