The migration of people to cities is one of the biggest problems facing the world’s cities today. Discuss the causes. What solutions could be used to tackle the situation?
Nowadays,
people
are moving to the cities
. Therefore
, cities
are suffering from this
challenge
globally. The main problem
is the lack of jobs for residents of rural areas
. One solution to this
problem
could be distributing supermarkets and industries
to the countryside.
These days, the shortage of jobs obligates individuals to migrate to the cities
. Unfortunately, this
problem
is not only one city but cities
across the world suffering this
challenge
. This
problem
has been created due to
job seekers. For example
, those who are living in rural areas
are busy working in factories or supermarkets that are located in the cities
, in this
case for time efficiency they prefer being in the cities
.
Distributing industries
to the countryside can be one solution for keeping people
in rural areas
. Most of this
problem
is due to
a large number of people
who are looking for jobs. Therefore
, the government should make plans or policies to contribute the source of work (supermarkets, industries
) to the rural area. It proved the cities
without noses, crowed, and air pollution moreover
, it led the rural residents to save the money that has been being spent on public transport or private cars oil. Consequently
, moving industries
to rural areas
is the best way to tackle the following problem
.
In conclusion, people
globally preferred moving town. It faces cities
to challenge
. It is due to
job seekers or lack of work for local residents. The solution to this
challenge
is that the government should contribute to factories in rural areas
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