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People no longer use newspapers and television because the internet plays the same role as them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recent technological advancements made individuals life much easier by diminishing the conservative ways of doing things. It is often argued that the evolution of modern
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 has had undermined the old ways of receiving obvious information on TV and newspapers. I tend to agree with
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 opinion because I believe that the
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 modernization in the technological areas will obsolete these old-techniques near in the future, and in
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 of all, information resources like newspapers and television provide folks with a very limited amount of details about the local and global surroundings. Whereas, the most social networking platforms
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 as Google, Mozilla Firefox and Internet Explorer presents a very clear and well-organized particular in the same way the TV and paper printed information does.
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nternet has a plethora of features and functions installed in it which makes it more proliferate as a product in the market and every individual around the globe is exploiting
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, it has
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ery convenient and flexible mobility.
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, people can simply locate internet network hotspots by being anywhere around the universe. Take 4G and 5G technologies,
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, which provides high package data with the fastest speed from the distance range of 5km - 100km which makes it easier for the consumers to have access wherever they are standing.
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, people nowadays like to prefer the hand-held devices with high storage data capacity , thereby making its predecessors like a television set and Newspaper nowhere near as equal to Wi-fi Hotspot (i.e, Internet) in terms of trading.
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, old-aged people are afraid of using new
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 and claims that
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 can have several detrimental effects on our health.
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, using computers will incur eye issues because it emits out radiation with high power, and
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 they argue that sitting on a chair for many hours can cause someone to suffer from spinal cord and back pain problems.
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, they are still making use of conservative products as there long-life terms. In conclusion, I believe that the government should invest more in technological related sectors in order to make people life's happier and simpler by developing more sustainable applications in computer networking.
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