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It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best for both individual and society. Do you agree or disagree? give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #society #answers
Nowadays, most of
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people
wants
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 to get married once they set their carrier.While it is said that
one
 should get married before the age of 30.
Thus
,It would be a good decision for both
life
parteners
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partners
.I strongly disagree with
this
 statement.
Such
 actions are not good for
one
life
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 without the carrier plan.In
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 will examine what is
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eason
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 my disagreement and will share my
expereince
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experience
 about
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with,Its depend
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person to person that when to decide to get married.
Initally
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Initially
Finally
,marriage
play
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 a crucial rule in
humen's
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human's
life
.It could put
deterimental
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detrimental
 impact to get married for both
individule
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individual
individuals
 if they are jobless or not enough mature.
For instance
,there are lots of
the
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responsibility comes in our
life
 after getting married
such
 as future plan about how to survive in
life
financialy
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financially
 and kids plan
respectivally
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respectively
. Because parents are not will longer responsible for their
childern
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children
.
In addition
,both
life
 partners should be earning,If in case of sickness or job lay off problem the other
one
 can handle out the situation.
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life
 is not restricted or banned in the rules. We
sholld
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should
 not insist
to
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 our
life
 to get married before the right time.
This
 is
also
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 responsibility of parents to
encourge
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encourage
 their children about the
life
 aspects. conclude, There will be everything appropriate as long as the
one
 carrier is
setteled
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settled
 while getting married. My recommendation
is be
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 a responsible person before
get
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 married.
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