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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of cloths. Do you agree or disagree。

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There has been heated to discussion on whether that garments which can show out a lot of information about the person of personality ,
culture
 and their
life style
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 . While I concede cloth is not the only way to know well a person ,by and large , I concur with
this
 view. To commence, no one can argue with the fact that there
have
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v
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arious style of
cloths
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clothes
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 in
this
 day and age, we can know some information from the
colour
 of garments wearing by people who have
choose
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,
for example
. my brother who is a taciturn person, he
love
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wear dark
colour
cloths
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 especially black, in his wardrobe have a lot of black
colour
 coat and T-shirt. Because black or dark
colour
are
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 sensing like cool, silent or mature which is pretty match with his character.
Furthermore
, garments
also
 enable people to divide easier what background of
culture
 they are. Different countries have
d
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ifferent kind of
cloths
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clothes
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 , for illustrate , people from Arabia they like to wear abaya according
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their traditional
culture
,
therefore
 other foreign people can quickly recognise them from which country background . To sum up, in
this
 modern year we have a variety of modern or traditional
of
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garments , while people from different
culture
 or background, they own character style of wearing.
Thus
 we can easy to know a lot from their choice of
cloths
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.
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