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A CHILD´S EDUCATION IS THE RESPONSABILITY OF THE PARENTS MORE THAN THE SCHOOLS

#child´s #education #responsability #parents #schools
THERE IS NO DOUBT THAT PARENTS ARE THE MAJOR RESPONSIBLE ON THEIR KIDS INSTRUCTION. WHILE SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE SCHOOLS ARE THE MAJOR RESPONSIBLE ON KID´S INSTRUCTION, OTHERS ARGUE THAT THE
PARENTES
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PARENTS
 SHOULD REPRESENT THE MOST IMPORTANT SUPPORT OVER A CHILD GROWTH. I WOULD AGREE WITH THE LATTER ARGUMENT AND IN
THIS
 ESSAY I WILL SUPPORT MY VIEW WITH EXAMPLES.
FIRSTLY
, I WOULD SAY PARENT´S GUIDANCE OVER LIFE IS
ONE
 OF THE MOST RELEVANT SUPPORT
ONE
 CAN RECEIVE. THE BASIS OF A GOOD
EDUCATION
 SHOULD BE
TEACHED
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/STARTED AT HOME SINCE THE EARLY LIFE OF A PERSON. TO ILLUSTRATE I COULD TELL THAT A
ONE YEAR OLD
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ONE-YEAR-OLD
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 KID MIGHT BE
TEACHED
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 ABOUT RULES AND
EDUCATION
 STATEMENTS.
THAT IS
 TO SAY TO RISE A SON SUCCESSFULLY PARENTS SHOULD DETERMINE LIMITS SINCE THE VERY EARLY BEGIN.
SECONDLY
, ONCE IT IS TIME TO START
SCHOOL
ONE
 SHOULD HAVE ENOUGH TRAITS DEVELOPED BASED ON/ OVER A STRICT
EDUCATION
 AND SO,
SCHOOL
 IS ONLY A PLACE WHERE THE CHILDREN SHOULD IMPROVE KNOWLEDGE AND LEARN OTHERS RULES RELATED TO SOCIAL ENVIRONMENT AND BEHAVIOR.
FOR INSTANCE
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IT IS IMPORTANT TO BRING UP THE POINT THAT A WELL RAISED KID WOULD ADAPT AND IMPROVE BETTER
INTHE
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 RELATIONSHIP AMONG
COLEAGUES
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COLLEAGUES
 THAN OTHER WHO HAD NEVER HEARD A “NO” BEFORE. AS A CONSEQUENCE, I COULD SAY THAT AT THE POINT A PERSON ARRIVES AT
SCHOOL
 THE BASIS OF HIS
EDUCATION
 SHOULD BE CONSTRUCTED ALREADY. AS A CONCLUSION, PARENTS HAVE THE HUGEST
RESPONSABILITY
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RESPONSIBILITY
 OF RAISING THEIR CHILDREN SUPPORTED ON THE
EDUCATION
 BASIS THEY WOULD BELIEVE AND WITHOUT EXPECTING
SCHOOL
 TO BE
RESPONSABLE
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RESPONSIBLE
 FOR
SUCH
 A PECULIAR THING
THAT IS
 SHARE PRINCIPLES AND RULES WITH YOUR DESCENDANTS.
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