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Scientist believe that computer will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. Discuss both points and give your own opinion

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Technology has been improved as time pass, which is great and
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, it is happening faster than expected, bringing some concerns about its power. There are few important points to
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 and find out pros and cons on
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artificial
inteligence
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intelligence
 and its features a positive development is
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 fact people can get huge benefits from it, as spending less time working on topics that require math knowledge or big researches as
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xample.
Moreover
,
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 of putting effort to find important information, that could be found in just one click or even through a voice
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.
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 as those things would make everyday routine and work much simple.
On the other hand
, technology development can have a bad effect in case it becomes smarter than
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uman brain, taking control of our thoughts and actions or even doing works that possibly make human expertise useless.
This
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 staff replaced by machines and
consequently
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chaos.
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, the new generation might not have a high standard
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education as they could not compete with technology. In the conclusion to it, I believe scientists ought
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control and assist technology development carefully to keep it away from taming world and lives, getting it just to help and make life easier.
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