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Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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When children are young, parents always have to take care
about
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 their children and watching their children.
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 after they grow up, children would not need as much parent's effort as they used to need.
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, parents should give them some
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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 about practical knowledge,
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 as how to find a good
place
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 and how to save their money efficiently. These kinds of information
is
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 useful when they live by themselves I want to talk about my
experince
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experience
 as an example. After I graduate
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university, I got a job in a different city that I
grown
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 up. I had to move out, so I started to find my own
place
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. That was my
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 time to find a
place
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, so I was struggling to find it. My parents had never told me before how to find the
place
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. Once I overcame
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 problem, I thought if my parents taught
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 information when I was a student, I would have
find
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 my
place
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 easily.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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