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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

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Undoubtedly, recently, the matter of children growing up inside of huge cities and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. I fully agree with
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 there are several advantages to living outside of a big
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, it is preferable and better for children to grow up in a big
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 for several reasons. In turn,
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 essay will discuss the reasons behind
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 fact. On the one hand, growing up of children in a metropolis can provide the children with some noticeable effects which are rooted in the fact that the merits of accessibility to the facilities, as well as easier living, are inextricably bound up.
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 to say that children who live in a big polis and grow up in
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 situation, have an extremely self-confidence in the youth and old age,
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 living in a big
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 should be considered as an important matter.
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, in a study by the psychiatrists and psychologist, which was done at Harvard University, declared that people who lived in a huge
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 and now are over 25, are significantly more successful than those of grew up outside of a town.
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, living and growing up in a big
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 might decrease the consequences of unwanted events in children's life. Some children specialists declare that the rate of mortality in children who live outside of a huge
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 is more than three-fold of children who live in a huge polis. To summarize, some people are of the opinion that children must grow up in a quiet environment, while others are opposed to
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 view. I am sure that the benefits of children growing up in a big
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 are not comparable with those of growing up outside of a big town.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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