Some countries invest in specialized sports facilities for top athletes but not for the average people. Is this a positive or negative development?

A certain number of nations allocate funds for professional athletic facilities, which are available only for first-class sportspeople, but not for ordinary citizens. In my opinion, it is rather an unfavourable development than a positive one.
First,
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the government should take care of the health and physical development of all citizens and not only
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elites.
This
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is because every working citizen pays taxes and should have equal rights
for
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social amenities
including
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specialized
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specialised
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sports
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centres.
Thus
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, funding of special-purpose
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facilities might be considered as social inequality, especially if they were not available
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a regular person.
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, when I had decided to start jogging, I was completely frustrated by the fact that a running ring with an excellent soft covering was not allowed for training if a person was not a member of the national team. Some people might argue that top athletes should have priority because they represent a country on the world stage.
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, despite the fact that international competitions and the reputation of the country are important, investing in professionals' needs
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does not pay off in the long term because the construction and maintenance of
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halls are highly expensive. Meanwhile, modern society has other crucial issues, which are in demand for funds
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as the health care system, city infrastructure, and environmental issues. In conclusion, I think that the latest tendency among certain governments to invest in
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facilities for superior sportspersons
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average people
behind
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behind,
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is a negative trend because every citizen should have equal rights.
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, in terms of revenue from international events
funding
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, funding
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of these elite
sport
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objects is not profitable.

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