Many people buy products that they do not really need and replace old products with new ones. Why do people buy things they do not really need? Do you think this is a good thing?

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individually which is mainly about people spending habit.The production cycle is

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improving

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and because of that advertising agency is demanding industry in the world for promoting people to buy a new thing mainly they don't need.

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,we can't ignore the impact of social pressure on social media websites

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as celebrity endorsement.

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type of advertisement mainly about luxury fashion or self-care brands.Another main type is mainly spread among young ones,which is using the

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gadgets to show their friends and make

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healthy impression in front of them.

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of expensive items and make them replace their electronic products to keep up with the trends.Vast advertisement is commonly based on commercial channel newspaper and magazines and

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has huge pressure for people to follow the trends Most of the people think that

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can help to grow the finance side of the world,but I mainly disagree with

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idea.In view of the fact that damaged caused by

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as environmental and mental outweighed its positive side.Misuse of brand awareness can

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an addiction to

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high cost

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things and individuals can face credit risk for

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can bring with itself not satisfied individuals economic status and it

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mental stress.

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, buying new gadgets

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a waste of money, but throwing the old ones not only wither wealth

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harm the environment, because the batteries of these appliances produce harmful chemicals which

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pollution in the environment and that

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disease. To conclude,people need to be aware of how advertising and social influence can change their spending habit and make them buying

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nnecessary product.Our main aid needs to be not showing success by buying new items,it needs to protect

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nvironment and our mental health.

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