In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

There are a lot of people who eat too much fast
food
. Fast
food
is not
the
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healthy
food
. If people ate fast
food
too often, they would have gotten a health problem,
such
as hyperlipidemia, high blood pressure and obesity.
However
, I do not agree to increase
t
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ax on fast
food
. There are several reasons why I disagree with
this
topic.
First
, the reason why many people want to eat fast
food
is
because
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cheap. Usually
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people who get those kinds of
food
are students or homeless people. They don't have enough money to go to a fancy restaurant.
Second
, a boundary condition of fast
food
is not obvious. What kinds of
food
are
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fast
food
and what kinds of
food
are healthy
food
? If
g
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overnment wants to
rise
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raise
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tax for fast
food
,
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than
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they have to figure out what real fast
food
is.
Last
, actually fast
food
is not
a
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only reason that
cause
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diseases. According to some experts, hamburger-representative fast
food
- has all kinds of nutriment. The thing that makes fast
food
as
a
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junk
food
is
the
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soda like coke, juice, and sprite.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overconsumption
  • Chronic diseases
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Sin tax
  • Subsidize
  • Affordability
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Paternalism
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Industry lobbying
  • Public health initiatives
  • Consumer behavior
  • Regulatory measures
  • Health-conscious
  • Processed foods
  • Fiscal policy
  • Preventative healthcare
  • Behavioral economics
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