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Some people think that it would be better if the whole family (uncles, aunts and grandparents) are involved in bringing up children rather than only parents. What is your opinion?

#people #uncles #aunts #grandparents #children #parents
Certain folks
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 presume that it would be ideal for a child if he or she is raised by all the extended family
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members
 
instead
 of just the parents. Even though many individuals welcome
this
 notion, in my opinion, I strongly disagree with it because
this
 could lead to confusion since different career goals are presented at the same time to the young confused mind and not all family relatives
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harbours
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 best interest at heart or might not have the right
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experience
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Firstly
, a kids mind is tender 
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herefore, pushing up different ideas
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simultaneously
 can result to distractions as
such
, the younger brain will certainly end up mastering nothing since it is difficult for the brain to comprehend a lot of information at once.
Moreover
, being detailed or grounded in one field has proved to be of vast benefits in today's labour market.  
For example
, it is evident that people with several
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guardians
 end up trying out several professions before they
finally
 settle for one or sometimes might not even settle at all. So to say, being proficient in ones discipline offers
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etter reward that shallow knowledge of many fields.
Secondly
, most relatives are
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 friends,
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they do not really care how the kid turns out in the future or may not have the right knowledge to educate the growing teenager,
such
 person must not be allowed to contribute towards the teens upbringing. Clearly
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you can agree with me that
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parents love is limitless which is absent in
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, even though 
this
 might seem insignificant but it makes a huge difference
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 the long run.  For
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instance
, in Nigeria, it is obvious that must
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 relations are
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illiterate
hence
, can only advise based on their narrow mindset. In my
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opinion
, I believe in the order to ensure 
a teens
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, optimal
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performance
, it is would be more effective
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 his or her extended
famliy
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family
 keeps off some key decisions in
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their training. To conclude,
Although
 it is always argued that one person does not train a child
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I believe it will be more
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beneficial
 to the teenager if his parents solely
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 decisions concerning their
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lives
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 so to avoid
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confusion
 and wrong advises which have proved to be
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detrimental
 to their future.
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