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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent days, people hold different views about whether we have become more or less dependent on others . While some argue that people are more reliant to others like they used to, I believe that we are more independent than people were in the past. On the one hand, there are reasons why it could be argued that we are more dependent on each other now.
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, life is complex and difficult, especially, the cost of living has increased so dramatically. Young adults tend to ask their parents for help when buying a house. Because property prices are higher than ever if,without help, it would be impossible for many people to pay a deposit and a mortgage.
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, people seem to be more ambitious nowadays ,they want a better life for their families. So, both parents usually need to work full-time and they depend on their support from grandparents and babysitters for childcare.
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, I would agree with those who believe that we are more independent these days .Some people think that dependence on others will be a waste of time.
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, becoming independent will increase confidence to face a difficult situation and it helps in enhancing decision-making skills.
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, many parents often encourage their children to study abroad
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 of going to the local university because
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 experience makes them understand the outside environment which helps to build their self-confidence when they learn to live alone.
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, thanks to the great popularity of the internet which allows us to work alone and from any part of the world. In conclusion, while there are some reasons to believe that we are more reliant on each other, my own view is that we are more independent than ever.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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