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The pie charts show the most liked sporting activities in the secondary schools of France in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Overall, swimming remained the most famous sport in the three years, and the least popular was tennis. The popularity of basketball and football fluctuated over the years. In 1990, 39%
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French students preferred swimming.
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 figure increased to 48% in 2000 and came down by 7% in 2010.
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, the share of tennis was just 4% in both 1990 and 2000.
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, it showed a marginal increase in the
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 year and peaked at 7%.
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students preferred each of football and basketball in 1990, the former game (18%) was way more popular than the latter (7%) in 2000. The trend,
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, was the opposite in 2010, as the popularity of basketball rose to 25% and that of football reduced to merely 8%. Other sports, too, had
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onsiderable following at 25%, 23% and 19% in 1990, 2000 and 2010 respectively.
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