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There are different customs in different countries related to how people eat, dress, and so on. Some think that people visiting a country should behave according to customs of the country they visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many believe travellers have an obligation to follow local customs. I am in agreement with
this
 sentiment generally but there are exceptions to
this
 rule where some flexibility is warranted. Proponents would argue that being culturally sensitive is a sign of respect. The burden of fitting in falls to the guest because they made the choice to travel to the
country
 in question.
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ollowing local traditions is crucial when in certain Middle Eastern countries. Some of the more religious countries enforce strict restrictions on common western practices like drinking alcohol and dressing freely. To respect the locals, tourists must modify their behaviour during their stay or risk offending residents and making a bad impression. If travellers persist in flouting local customs, they are in the wrong as there are many other more liberal options for international travel.
However
, there are meaningful areas where locals must
also
 be receptive to the views of travellers.
This
 can be broadly grouped into religious and personal beliefs.
For example
, an individual from a Muslim
country
 travelling abroad may expect to be allowed to wear a headscarf in public during their visit.
This
 should be allowed even in situations,
such
 as during the playing of the national anthem at sporting events in the United States, when people must remove their hats. The same principle applies to personal dietary restrictions
such
 as those of vegetarians and vegans. If they are in a
country
 where locals primarily eat meat, they ought to be able to make substitutions and amendments to the menu if possible. In conclusion, it is typically important to follow the customs of a
country
 when travelling to show deference but
this
 can be outweighed at times by personal and religious convictions. Individuals should
also
 be mindful of potential conflicts when choosing a travel destination from the onset.
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