In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The increase in shopping malls in every

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great trend these days.

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people prefer to shop in

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rather than going to

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ncreasing trend of shopping malls.

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loss when people stop purchasing from their shops and choose

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will lead to unemployment and crisis.

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institute shows that 80% of the population in a city prefer to shop

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ide range of selection. S the world will face

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crisis if malls become

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customers will not be able to afford in shopping

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it is staggering fact that even

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average

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residents choose malls these days, but

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citizens may not be able to pay for items sold in

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hyper malls

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people in developing countries now

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hunger as they have no money to purchase from malls as

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stores being closed or either not

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accessible

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consideration towards

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people is important when a small

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decides to close. In conclusion, it is

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unavailable

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lead to increase unemployment for other section of people in the society and

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poverty

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losure of small stores when people travel to malls for shopping.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Building underground transport systems (subways) is the best way to deal with traffic problems in cities.

as countries gave developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes why does this happen ? how does this affect society?

Some people think that people should choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family. Do you think money is an important factor when choosing a job? What other factors should be considered?

Write about the following topic: Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society? Give reasons for your answer.

“Prison is the only truly effective form of punishment, because it separates criminals from society.” To what extent do you support this view? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.