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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that parents play an essential role in raising children in any countries. In my opinion, it is better that parents to learn some basic knowledge before taking care of babies.
Nevertheless
, I disagree that we should force all mothers and fathers to attend parenting courses. In my view, new parents are encouraged to read parenting books and watch parenting videos from
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nternet. It is a good way for mothers and fathers to learn important parenting skills
such
 as understanding babies’ needs, nutrition problem and medical problems, With these kinds of basic knowledge, it is easier to put babies in risk.
Moreover
, new parents may
also
 learn parenting skills from their family members, friends and coworkers.
Besides
, adults learn to be good parents by trial and error. They may try different methods when facing different children, and
therefore
, they may find a suitable way to educate their children.
On the other hand
, I would argue that it is practically impossible that parents should be taken the mandatory courses. Many prospective parents have
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usy schedule and they may not have time to take lessons.
Moreover
, there are many new parents every year in Hong Kong. It is unfeasible for the government to provide the parenting lessons to all new parents. It required a lot of resources.
Last
 but not least, if some parents refused to take the lessons, will they be punched? I believe it is not realistic to enforce all parents to take the training course. In conclusion,
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ompulsory parenting training course is not a practical solution.
However
, The government may provide useful information, video on the internet.
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