Children today are told dependent on computer and electronic entertainment.It would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports and games. Do you agree or disagree.

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Children are the most valuable gift of the god of their parents. It has been put forward that nowadays children spend a lot of time in technology while

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it would be not beneficial for children. I agree with

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statement that children must play sports and games.

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with, there could be a problem when children are dependent on computers and electronics entertainment. The

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and foremost the reason is that children keep away from studies. they spend their time playing games and they

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distract their goals. The

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reason is the health issues. A good illustration is that when children stay with the technology they can face health problems

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as obesity and weaker eyes.

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, A research had proved that, from Cambridge school that 60% of student wear sunglasses whom they are not taking part in curriculum activities.

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, there are many benefits to children when they are playing sports.

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, they can fit physically as well as mentally. Children can

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improve their cognitive skills. The

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reason is that when children take part in games, it is not beneficial for health but

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in academic results.

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, a survey conducted from Larkana board that students who participated in curriculum activities, they are more

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as well as fit and active. To conclude, the above-mentioned argument in a nutshell. It can be acknowledged that parents should responsible for their children and encourage them to take part in sports

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of playing games on mobile. It helps them to stay healthy and energetic

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Children today are told dependent on computer and electronic entertainment.It would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports and games. Do you agree or disagree.

What can we learn from the boys' experience about the nature of power and leadership?

Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education classes in the curriculum children, others think that for all school age children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion,

Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the past, most people worked for small businesses, while more people now work for large businesses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for large businesses?